Many companies are
being blamed for climate change and forests destruction, globalization,
however, is the main contributor of the harm done to the environment. In his book on
Globalization, (Nayan Chandra, 2007) mentioned that global consumerism habits
have caused more damage to the environment than globalized companies. However, the progress in technology influenced by
globalization has provided an unmatched platform for advocates to spread environmental
awareness worldwide. The effects of intensified crop production for export due
to globalization have led to further deforestation globally.
World
Bank reported that deforestation has contributed to one-fifth of the world’s
carbon release. In addition, Wall Street Journal (2004) mentioned that the
heavy production of low cost goods in China have generated pollutants which
have traversed and affected other nations too. Globalization has strengthened
the world’s interconnection such that information is broadcasted and
consequences are felt quicker than before. Consumers are more apprehensive of
the dangers of global warming. Global warming would cause a reduction in the
world’s economy by one-fifth as the world has to recompense for the damages made.
It has also led to social problems other than economical problems. For example,
flooding has caused millions of people to become homeless. Ironically, this
world being well equipped with technologies has been unable to counteract the
problem. Global warming threats can be avoided only when nations commit to act
on them together. A collaborative success of the Montreal protocol has reduced
the depletion of the ozone layer. Furthermore, the upturns in economy,
industrialization and environmental guidelines have declined the tendency
towards deforestation. Living in this interconnected world, nations depend on
each other to deal with major disasters. The international governance of the
United Nations has been inefficient at solving some of the major catastrophes. However,
these disasters are mainly due to the superpowers’ failure to support the UN’s
services and roles in attaining higher achievements for the world. Although, several
independent institutions have dealt with the interconnected problems of the
world, the leadership of governments is still the cornerstone to effectively
combat international problems. The political powers have an influence in globalization
in its growth and the direction it takes.
It's far too long at over 500 words, so please edit it. Note the errors as well
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You need to focus the above section on the overview
/Globalization has intensified trading and the development of international corporations(Is this negative??)\ along with its detrimental effects on the environment. Trade growth has led to massive deforestation. UN Food and Agricultural Organization reported that 18 million acres of the forests worldwide are destroyed annually due to deforestation. Companies also cause worldwide environmental destruction during crop production. World Bank reported that deforestation due to farming has contributed to one-fifth of the world’s carbon release. Globalization has hastened deforestation globally; yet, the governments are not safeguarding and restoring the forests.
(Edit the above to avoid repetition, as well as cutting down on the number of words)
Globalization has advanced China in the production sector; catering to the global needs. Greenpeace reported that China’s expansion in soybean production has attracted foreign investors. However, it has caused greater deforestation and harm to the environment and the world. China’s intense production of low cost goods has heavily polluted China(Avoid repetition). Wall Street Journal (2004) mentioned that pollutants originating from China /are widely distributed to other nations (rephrase: this makes it sound as if the pollutants are sold by China to other nations!)\.
The globalization has strengthened the world’s interconnection such that consequences were(Tense) felt quicker than before. The dangers of global warming are globally publicized. An economist Nicholas Stern(Citation) reported that global warming would cause a reduction in the world’s economy by one-fifth as the world has to recompense for the damages made(Wrong word). Flooding, a dangerous outcome of global warming has caused millions of people to become homeless. Ironically, this world being well equipped with technologies has been unable to counteract the problem.
Global warming threats can be avoided only when there is an efficient international organization and control. (^)Kyoto protocol is unsuccessful as USA, a major contributor of greenhouse gases, was not involved and nations that have /agreed in(rephrase)\ the cause are not serious and committed. //However, a collaborative success of the Montreal protocol has shown to contain further ozone depletion(??)\\.
Living in this interconnected world, nations depend on each other to deal with major disasters. The international governance of the United Nations has been inefficient at undertaking(Wrong word) some of the major catastrophes. However, these disasters are mainly due to the world’s superpowers(punctuation) failure to support the UN’s services and roles in attaining higher achievements for the world. A great number of independent institutions /have given services(??)\ in dealing with interconnected problems of the world. Nevertheless, the leadership of governments is the cornerstone to effectively combat international problems. Globalization has been a longstanding political affair that has the power to drive its growth and the direction it takes. (525 words)
Thank you Sir :) I have edited my summary. Is it ok to add in some examples from the text in summary?
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